What I love about this is that you bypass the usual painstaking tally of what exactly happened to Sam here in favour of this utterly unreliable glimpse from inside Sam's addled little brain, it really does make the situation a lot more haunting, and I love detail of the rain.
Where all that ambiguity really delivers for me, though, is right bloody here:
“Gene.” Sam watched as Gene fixed a stare on him again. “What did you do?”
Because it's just plain brilliant, after all that implied violence, that we also don't know just how far Gene was willing to go to get retribution for Sam, especially when Gene admits that the blood on his clothes is just 'mostly' Sam's. I love your Gene here, he fits the story beautifully :)
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on 2008-09-12 01:34 pm (UTC)Where all that ambiguity really delivers for me, though, is right bloody here:
“Gene.” Sam watched as Gene fixed a stare on him again. “What did you do?”
Because it's just plain brilliant, after all that implied violence, that we also don't know just how far Gene was willing to go to get retribution for Sam, especially when Gene admits that the blood on his clothes is just 'mostly' Sam's. I love your Gene here, he fits the story beautifully :)