I like it how you worked with images in this fic - bare feet, colors, etc. Nice work! :)
As far as betaing goes, you're missing a few commas and apostrophes here and there, and there's this Even though he gazing at every person intently in the second scene.
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on 2007-08-15 11:37 pm (UTC)As far as betaing goes, you're missing a few commas and apostrophes here and there, and there's this Even though he gazing at every person intently in the second scene.
Nice fic! I enjoyed it a lot :).